WWW: Some confident writing, Elliot (my name is spelt ELLIOTT!), that makes use of some autonomous research and provides a range of examples (on the last page).
EBI: The essay takes too long to get started: Rewrite the introduction and first paragraph to include specific details and explicit reference to institutions/audiences.
New and digital media has seen significant changes over the past 20 years and coming to the forefront of mainstream media, for example the Internet. The Internet is on the news every night, for example the presidential debate causing a personal record of tweets per minute for President Barack Obama.
The media revolution, possibly the biggest cultural change worldwide since the industrial revolution has taken the world by storm. The Internet empowers people all around the world. For example in east Africa, the Arab spring where information released by wiki leaks about the bad government and managed to over through their government.
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